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The diagram below shows the manufacture of fuel

The diagram below shows the manufacture of fuel GJ57B
The diagram illustrates the manufacture of ethanol fuel from corn. The process has appriximately 9 steps to making fuel from corn. Overall, in the diagram it is observed that, manufacture of fuel takes atleast 2 days to complete. First of all in the corn manufacturer add water then cook for some time after it is converted into the fuel. On the one hand it can be seen that, first of all, corn stored in one large room then cooking for 4 hours. After that milled corn is cooking for 4 hours and after that add water into it. In addition it is mover to fermenting for 48 hours. Then it moved to separation stage. In the separation stage, it seprate ethanol from fermented coal and rest weste is called as by product. After that, purifying stage comes into the picture, in this stage ethanol become purify and it takes at least 5 hours. Then it is stored into continer and then transport that ethanol.
The diagram illustrates the manufacture of
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ethanol
fuel from
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corn
. The process has
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appriximately
9 steps to making fuel from corn.

Overall
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is observed
that, manufacture of fuel takes
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atleast
2 days to complete.
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First of all
in the
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corn
manufacturer
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add
water then cook for
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some
time after it
is converted
into the fuel.

On the one hand it can be
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seen
that,
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first of all
,
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corn
stored in one large room then cooking for 4
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hours
. After that milled
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corn
is cooking for 4
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hours
and after that
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add
water into it. In
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addition it
is mover to fermenting for 48
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hours
. Then it
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moved
to separation stage.

In the separation stage, it
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seprate
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ethanol
from fermented coal and rest
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weste
is called
as by product. After that, purifying stage
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comes
into the picture, in this stage
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ethanol
become purify and it takes at least 5
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hours
. Then it
is stored
into
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continer
and then transport that
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ethanol
.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the manufacture of fuel

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