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The charts below show information on car ownership and money spent on car in UK in 2002.

The charts below show information on car ownership and money spent on car in UK in 2002. Wyoob
The pie charts represents the data of car proprietor md money expenditure for same in the UK in the year 2002. Overall, it can be observed that, largest proportion of individual had economy car, whilst less had luxury. Additionally, second pie chart depicts the same scenario as ownership, they spent currency for buying car. Moreover, all the data are measured in percentage. It is quite evident from both the pie charts that, in UK 74% of people had economy cars and, 191 million £ used to buy that cars. However, less than ten percentage of individual are owner of luxury cars, but they spent 121 million £ to purchase that car, which was second highest used money to bought cars. Moreover, for purchasing sports car people of UK invest less pounds as compare to other cars, they spent 14 million £ lesser than to luxury car's owners. Additionally, 18% of mankind had sports car in UK.
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money expenditure for same in the UK in the year 2002.

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proportion of individual had economy
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, whilst less had luxury.
Additionally
, second pie chart depicts the same scenario as ownership, they spent currency for buying
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Moreover
, all the data
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in percentage.

It is quite evident from both the pie charts that, in UK 74% of
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and, 191 million £
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, less than ten percentage of individual are owner of luxury
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they spent 121 million £ to
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Moreover
, for purchasing sports
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people
of UK invest
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pounds as compare to other
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, they spent 14 million £ lesser than to luxury car's owners.
Additionally
, 18% of mankind had sports
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in UK.
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