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The chart shows student expenditure over a three- year period it the united kingdom

The chart shows student expenditure over a three- year period it the united kingdom PV7gK

The bar graph elicits the spending of United kingdom students who are pursuing tertiary education where the age is in between 26 from 1996 to 1999. First of all, In 1996 students expended nearly 25% on accommodation which was reduced in 1999. With accommodation, food bills and household goods which was 25% had been paid by students in 1999. However, it lessened in the year 1999. Additionally, expenditure like essential travel and entertainment were increased in 1999 in compare to 1996 which was respectively 6-7% and 32%. Entertainment was the highest expenditure of teenagers. On the other hand, students neglected expense on children in the year 1999. Moreover, money consumption on non-essential travel and course were reduced in between the gap of 3 years. Last but not least, other expenditures were almost 10% which increased by approximately 16% in 1999. To cap it all, It is observed that students spent most of their earnings on entertainment whereas they save money on accommodation, food bills, unimportant traveling and on course in comparison to 1996.

The bar graph elicits the spending of The proper noun "United Kingdom" needs to be capitalized.United Kingdom
United kingdom
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 who are pursuing tertiary education where the age is in between 26 from 1996 to 1999.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, In 1996 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 expended nearly
 25% on accommodation which was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviated
reduced
 in 1999. With accommodation, food bills and household This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 which was 25% had been paid
 by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 in 1999. However
, it lessened in the year 1999. Additionally
, expenditure like essential travel and entertainment were increased
 in 1999 in compare to 1996 which was respectively
 6-7% and 32%. Entertainment was the highest expenditure of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
.

On the other hand
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 neglected expense on children in the year 1999. Moreover
, money consumption on non-essential travel and course were This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviated
reduced
 in between the gap of 3 years. Last This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 not least,

other expenditures were almost 10% which increased by approximately 16% in 1999.

To cap it all, It is observed
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 spent most of their earnings on entertainment whereas they save money on accommodation, food bills, unimportant traveling and on course in

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comparison
 to 1996. 