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The charts below show information about US honey-bee colonies and honey production 1970-2010

The charts below show information about US honey-bee colonies and honey production 1970-2010 d9R8d
The first bar chart demonstrates how many colonies of US honey-bee in million, between 1970 and 2010. The second chart indicates the amount of honey production in tonnes during the same period. According to the figure mentioned in the charts, it is noticeable that the number of honey production reached the highest in 1970 while there had the least bee colonies in 2010. Additionally, both two things the charts show tend to drop decade by decade, from 1970 to 2010. To be specific, there were nearly 4 million bee colonies in 1970, which produced the most honey production at the same time, 130 000 tonnes. After 10 years, the number of honey-bee continued rising slightly to reach the highest index, 4. 3 million. On the other hand, honey-making fell to 110 000 in 1980 and then went up to 120 000 after a decade. The difference was around 10 000 tonnes. Considering the bee colonies, the quantity of it continued dropping relatively, from above 4 million to 3. 5 million colonies during the same period. Both honey-bee and honey-making decreased significantly between 1990 and 2010. In detail, the production fell each decade until reached the lowest in 2010, 70 000 tonnes. Besides, the bee colonies dropped twofold in 2010 compared with 1980, which were only about 2 million.
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, between 1970 and 2010. The second
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indicates the amount of honey
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in tonnes during the same period.

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, it is noticeable that the number of honey
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reached the highest in 1970 while there had the least bee
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in 2010.
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tend to drop decade by decade, from 1970 to 2010.

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in 1970, which produced the most honey
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at the same time, 130 000 tonnes. After 10 years, the number of honey-bee continued rising
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to reach the highest index, 4. 3
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, honey-making fell to 110 000 in 1980 and then went up to 120 000 after a decade. The difference was around 10 000 tonnes. Considering the bee
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, the quantity of it continued dropping
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to 3. 5
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during the same period. Both honey-bee and honey-making decreased
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between 1990 and 2010. In detail, the
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fell each decade until reached the lowest in 2010, 70 000 tonnes.
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