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the charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015.

the charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015. gdd7
The three pie charts describe information about the percentage of degrees achieved in four categories of fields at the National University in three decades. Overall, Computer science had been the most popular during the three years shown. However the remaining fields of study changed too. As we can seen at the pie chart in 1995, Computer sciences got one of the major portion of graduates accounted by 30 percent as well as Business which obtained 30 % from the total of degreed granted. Medicine study achieved a quarter of the total of students graduated represented by 25 %, the minority was seen at Law field with just 15 percent. The figures changed somewhat on 2005, the popularity of Computer science continued during this year illustrated by an increase of 10 percent. Another area of study Medicine had gained 25 % of degrees. when it comes to Business program, it had dropped 10 per cent with a similar patron in Law that suffered a drop of 5% during this year. subsequently, in 2015 the amount of degrees granted by computer science kept rising even more, with 45 % shown at the graph. Meanwhile, Medicine and Business had dropped to 25% and 15% respectively. Law had a rise of 5% for this year. it could be analyzed that the only field which got a continuous increase during the years shown by the pies was Computer science.
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at the National University in three decades.
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, Computer
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had been the most popular during the three years shown.
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the remaining
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of study
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at the pie chart in 1995, Computer
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sciences
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one of the major portion of graduates accounted by 30 percent
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granted. Medicine study achieved a quarter of the total of students graduated represented by 25 %, the minority was
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at Law
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15 percent. The figures
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somewhat on 2005, the popularity of Computer
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continued during this
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illustrated by an increase of 10 percent. Another area of study Medicine had gained 25 % of
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to Business program, it had dropped 10 per cent with a similar patron in Law that suffered a drop of 5% during this
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, in 2015 the amount of
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granted by computer
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science
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rising even more, with 45 % shown at the graph. Meanwhile, Medicine and Business had dropped to 25% and 15%
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. Law had a rise of 5% for this
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a continuous increase during the years shown by the pies was Computer
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