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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. dYKp

The flow chart illustrates different steps for brick manufacturing for the building industries. It can be clearly seen that, the whole process consists of seven steps during which the raw material is dried, heated, cooled and packed. The first step of brick manufacturing is digging the clay with a large digger. This clay is then filtered by metal grid and processed in roller machine and then, mixed with sand and water. In the third stage, the mixture is either kept in a mould or cut in a wire cutter to make a raw shaped of the bricks. In the next step it till is kept in kiln both moderate and high at 200-980 and 870-1300 centigrade respectively. Later it is transferred to cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. In the last two steps it is packaged and delivered.

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different
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steps
 for brick manufacturing for the building industries.

It can be clearly
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seen
 that, the whole process consists of seven You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
steps
 during which the raw material is dried
, heated, cooled and packed.

The first
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step
 of brick manufacturing is digging the clay with a large digger. This clay is then filtered by metal grid and processed in roller machine and then, mixed with sand and water. In the third stage, the mixture is either This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 in a Possible spelling mistake. 'mould' is British English.mold
mould
 or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 in a wire cutter to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a raw shaped of the bricks. In the next
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step
 it till is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 in kiln both moderate and high at 200-980 and 870-1300 centigrade respectively
. Later it is transferred
 to cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. In the last two You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
steps
 it is packaged
 and delivered. 

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Academic

American English

3 paragraphs

137 words

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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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