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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. kydK
The chart tables illustrate the employment rates of men and women in Canada, South Korea, and Sweden in 2005 and 2015. In 2005, the percentage of men employment in all 3 different countries are significantly high. In 2015, the percentage followed the same pattern as shown in 2005. In 2005, among three countries, Sweden had the highest men employment rates at nearly 8 percent and women rates at approximately 45 percent. Meanwhile, the percentage of men employment rates in Korea was around 75 percent and only 30 percent for women employment rates. Canada had men employment rates at 60 percent, while having women employment percentage at nearly 40 percent. In 2015, Sweden’s men employment rates slightly dropped to 70 percent, while women employment rates increased to 50 percent. For Korea, the percentage of men and women employment insignificantly rose to nearly 80 percent and 35 percent, respectively. Likewise, Canada’s percentages of men employment rose slightly to 70 percent, but women employment rates increased notably from nearly 40 percent to 55 percent. Overall, there were upward trends in employment rates of both men and women of three countries.
The chart tables illustrate the
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in Canada, South Korea, and Sweden in 2005 and 2015. In 2005, the
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In 2015, Sweden’s
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