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the charts below information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland in 2010.

the charts below information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland in 2010. 6xxmG
The bar chart and two pie charts illustrate the information about the population of Glasgow having three different type of education ( University, School and those with have no qualifications) in 2010 in Scotland. Information is devided into different age groups in bar chart and by gender in pie charts. First, looking at the bar chart in more details, the majority of young people was their University degree while, this was 50% among 50 to 75 age groups. Interestingly, older people's university degree was the lowest compared to whole bar chart. However, people - who have no qualification- followed the exact riverse trend compare to university degree. Eventually, the percentage of men and women was one-third but sometimes it was slight ups and downs in the pie charts. Particularly, the ratio of women was lightly higher than that of men.
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and two pie
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illustrate the information about the population of Glasgow having three
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, School and those with have no qualifications) in 2010 in Scotland. Information is
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and by gender in pie
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in more
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, the majority of young
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degree while, this was 50% among 50 to 75 age groups.
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degree was the lowest compared to whole bar
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.
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,
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people
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who have no qualification- followed the exact
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trend compare to
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Eventually
, the percentage of
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men
and women was one-third
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it was slight ups and downs in the pie
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