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The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. xmm8g
The chart illustrates a detailed information about the world wide sales of gaming software, CD's and DVD or video over four years i. e from 2000 to 2003. The number of sales are in billions of dollars. Overall, it is observed that the sales of CD's stayed more or else the same throughout. While the least sales is in gaming software in the year 2000 with an approximate sale of 15 billion dollars. However, the purchases of the games software increased gradually to close 20 billion dollars in the year 2003. A similar pattern is followed in DVD/video sales. Their sales is close to 20 billion in 2000 but increased upto slightly above 30 billion dollar worth of sales. A consistent market persisted in case of CD's with a slight variation over the years. However, it managed t have highest sales with minor changes in 35 billion dollars of sales from 2000 to 2003.
The chart illustrates
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a detailed information
about the
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world wide
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sales
of gaming software, CD's and DVD or video over four years i. e from 2000 to 2003. The number of
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sales
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are
in
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billions
of dollars.

Overall
, it
is observed
that the
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sales
of
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CD's
stayed more or else the same throughout.
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While
the least
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sales
is in gaming software in the
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year
2000 with an approximate
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sale
of 15
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billion
dollars.

However
, the
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purchases
of the
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games
software increased
gradually
to close 20
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billion
dollars in the
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year
2003. A similar pattern
is followed
in DVD/video
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sales
. Their
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sales
is close to 20
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billion
in 2000
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but
increased
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upto
slightly
above 30
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billion
dollar worth of sales.

A consistent market persisted in case of CD's with a slight variation over the years.
However
, it managed t have
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highest
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sales
with minor
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changes
in 35
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billion
dollars of
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sales
from 2000 to 2003.

IELTS academic The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
154 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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