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The charts below illustrate accommodation choices in the country of Evonia for people aged from 17-29 years, 30-45 years, and over 45 years.

The charts below illustrate accommodation choices in the country of Evonia for people aged from 17-29 years, 30-45 years, and over 45 years. RKYQ
The Pie charts demonstrate the variety of living places in the Evonia country for different age groups (17-29 years, 30-45 years, over 45 years). Overall, the charts indicates that majority of young people live in different kinds of rented apartments while more older people preferably live in own ones. All age groups have the same percentage of people who live in single rental accommodation (about 20-25%). 35 % of individuals stay in shared rental accommodation in 17-29 ages and this tendency has downward trend in middle age group (less than 10 %) then it falls up to 3 % in older group. 30 % of youngsters 17 and 29 live in hostel whereas only 2 % of middle aged choose the same type of accommodation and there is no people among elders who stay in hostels. Significantly small share of young people have their own houses and flats (2% and 12%) compare with more older groups. Moreover, both of groups 30-45 years old and 45 years and over have almost the same proportion of owning their homes and apartments (approximately 30% and 35%).
The Pie charts demonstrate the variety of living places in the
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(17-29 years, 30-45 years, over 45 years).

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in
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in
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ones. All
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age
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have the same percentage of
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who
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in single rental accommodation (about 20-25%).

35 % of individuals stay in shared rental accommodation in 17-29
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and this tendency has downward
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trend
in middle
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(less than 10 %) then it falls up to 3 % in older
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% of youngsters 17 and 29
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in hostel whereas
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middle aged
choose the same type of accommodation and there is no
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among elders who stay in hostels.
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share of young
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have their
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houses
and flats (2% and 12%) compare with
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more older
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30-45 years
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and 45 years and over have almost the same proportion of owning their homes and apartments (approximately 30% and 35%).

IELTS academic The charts below illustrate accommodation choices in the country of Evonia for people aged from 17-29 years, 30-45 years, and over 45 years.

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