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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. GyBe
The chart demonstrates the percentages of graduates from Brighton Universtiy in the year 2019 starting various employment areas. Overall it is clearly seen that, the major part of graduates started to work in service industries. In addition to this point, education, politics and government, and manufacturing industry sectorts have the almost the half of the all employees from Brighton University. Employees who started in the sector of service industries made up almost one third of the all people which is the major part of the pie chart while the manufacturing industry is the second one with 16. 3%. Furthermore, education and politics & government share the one quarter of the graph with 14. 7 and 12. 1 per cent. Regarding the small rates, the people entering the sport sector is merely 0. 1% which is the smallest percentages of the all chart. The charity and the other categories have relatively least percentages with 0. 3 and 2. 8 per cent respectively. Besides, science & technology, and transportation and warehousing industries have the closer rates with 7. 3% and 7. 8% respectively.
The chart demonstrates the percentages of graduates from Brighton
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in the year 2019 starting various employment areas.

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that, the major part of graduates
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to work in service
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industries
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government
, and manufacturing
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industry
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sectorts
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half of the all employees from Brighton University.

Employees who
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started
in the sector of service
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industries
made up almost one third of the all
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people
which is the major part of the pie chart while the manufacturing
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industry
is the second one with 16. 3%.
Furthermore
, education and politics &
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government
share the one quarter of the graph with 14. 7 and 12. 1 per cent.

Regarding the
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small
rates, the
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people
entering the sport sector is
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0. 1% which is the smallest percentages of the all chart. The charity and the other categories have
relatively
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percentages with 0. 3 and 2. 8 per cent
respectively
.
Besides
, science & technology, and transportation and warehousing
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industries
have the closer rates with 7. 3% and 7. 8%
respectively
.
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