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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. pr59
The given line graph illustrates the jobless rate of the countryside and the city in Australia over the period of 2012.   We can see that the jobless rate of the countryside had a downward tendency while the trend of the city had a noticeable rise throughout the year. The first quarter shows that the highest and lowest unemployment percentage between rural and urban areas is 6. 5 and just above 2 respectively.   Afterwards, the former gradually reduced to 5 and the latter leapt to 4 in the second quarter which is merely 1% difference. According to the provided information, the unemployment rate in rural areas declined slowly and rose subsequently until the fourth quarter, while the unemployment rate in urban areas experienced a fluctuation from 4% decreased to 2% between the second and the third quarter.   Overall, the unemployment rate of both districts had reached 5% by the end of the year.
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line graph illustrates the jobless
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of the countryside and the city in Australia over the period of 2012.
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We can
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that the jobless
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rate
of the countryside had a downward tendency while the trend of the city had a noticeable rise throughout the year.

The
first
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shows
that the highest and lowest
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unemployment
percentage between rural and urban areas is 6. 5 and
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just
above 2
respectively
.
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Afterwards, the former
gradually
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reduced
to 5 and the latter leapt to 4 in the second
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which is
merely
1% difference.

According to the provided information, the
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unemployment
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rate
in rural areas declined
slowly
and rose
subsequently
until the fourth
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quarter
, while the
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unemployment
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rate
in urban areas experienced a fluctuation from 4% decreased to 2% between the second and the third
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quarter
.
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Overall
, the
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unemployment
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of both districts had reached 5% by the
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of the year.

IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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