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The chart below shos the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport City centre from 2003 - 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shos the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport City centre from 2003 - 2012. 5M8B
The chart demonstrate the alter that took place in three alternative areas of crimes in newport city center over the period of 9 years Overall, it can be seen that, in inner city car thef crime is the increasing trend whereas, burglary crime is the decreasing trend over the timeframe. According to chart, initially the incident of burglary, at peak at 3500 in the 2300 and after it almost reached to the 4000 incident in 2004 then it significantly decline to almost 1000 cases in 2008. The was a slight zig-zag trend of bulgary phenomena by the end of the period it reached to just under 1500 incident. Starting further, incident of car theft was stood at appropriate 3000 incident and remain steady till in the year 2005 then it gradually fall down at 2000 in the 2006 from 2006 to 2012 hits of many fluctuations trend of car thief incident and in the last it just above 2500 incident and the percentage of Robbery incident rate was the lowest of all of the crimes, it was just under 1000 incident from starting period to end of the period.
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the alter that took place in three alternative areas of
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of 9 years

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whereas, burglary
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is the decreasing
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over the timeframe.

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of burglary, at peak at 3500 in the 2300 and after it almost reached to the 4000
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in 2004 then it
significantly
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to almost 1000 cases in 2008.
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was a slight
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under 1500 incident.

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and remain steady till in the year 2005 then it
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down at 2000 in the 2006 from 2006 to 2012 hits of
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of car thief
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above 2500
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and the percentage of Robbery
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rate was the lowest of
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IELTS academic The chart below shos the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport City centre from 2003 - 2012.

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