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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. 5rpP
The line chart indicates the percentage of unemployment rate in Australia during 2012. Overall, it is clear from the chart that the rate of unemplyment in remote areas was higher than in city areas over this period of time. However, the proportion of people who have no jobs in remote areas was declined at the end of the year while this figure for city areas was contradicted. it was reched the maximum. In January 2012, there were around 6. 5% in rural areas who unemployed and the rate was dropped in second quarter. Unfortunately, in the third quater, the percentage of this group of people was climed up again before it slightly dropped and constantec at 5%, approximately. In contrast, city areas had just only about 2% of unemployment rate but the figure was very fluctuated. it dramatically raised to 4% in the second quater then sharply fall into 2% in the third quater. After that, the percentage was volatiled again by increasing to 4% for the second time of the year and it finally reach its peak at almost 5% at the end of the fourth quater.
The line chart indicates the percentage of unemployment
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in Australia during 2012.

Overall
, it is
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clear
from the chart that the
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rate
of
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unemplyment
in remote
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was higher than in city
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over this period of time.
However
, the proportion of
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people
who have no jobs in remote
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was declined
at the
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end
of the year while this figure for city
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areas
was contradicted
.
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it
was
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reched
the maximum.

In January 2012, there were around 6. 5% in rural
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who unemployed
and the
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was dropped
in second quarter. Unfortunately, in the third
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quater
, the percentage of this group of
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climed
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constantec
at 5%, approximately.

In contrast
, city
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about 2% of unemployment
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rate
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the figure was
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fluctuated.
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dramatically
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quater
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fall into 2% in the third
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. After that, the percentage was
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IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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