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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

This pie chart presents the findings of surveys which were conducted in one Africa country to investigate the primary porpuses for using phones by teenagers during the period from 2016 to 2019. It is clear that it has been proved that there are many reasons that lead those teenagers to use their mobile phone. In other words, the use of digital camera, the ability to send emails, the ability to call anyone, and lastly the use of different social networks are considered the main reason that let them use their phones. According to the pie chart, the results show that almost half of the teenagers were using their phone for the sake of using the social networks between 2016 and 2019. Additionally, the rate of using the phones by teenagers to send emails slightly derceased through the four years to reach the percentage of only 19%. on the other hand, it can be obviously seen that the rate of using digital camera increased. Finally, calling is a feature that encouraged only few teenagers, as compared to other reasons, to use their phones. To sum up, we could say that there are many reasons for using phones by teenagers, but they have different rates.
This pie chart presents the findings of surveys which
were conducted
in one Africa country to investigate the primary
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for using
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phones
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during the period from 2016 to 2019. It is
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been proved
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reasons
that lead those
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teenagers
to
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use
their mobile
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phone
.
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, the
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use
of digital camera, the ability to
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send
emails, the ability to call anyone, and
lastly
the
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use
of
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different
social networks
are considered
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reason
that
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let
them
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use
their phones.

According to the pie chart, the results
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that almost half of the
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teenagers
were using their
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phone
for the sake of using the social networks between 2016 and 2019.
Additionally
, the rate of using the
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phones
by
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teenagers
to
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send
emails
slightly
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derceased
through the four years to reach the percentage of
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only
19%.
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on
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obviously
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seen
that the rate of using digital camera increased.
Finally
, calling is a feature that encouraged
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only
few
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teenagers
, as compared to other
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reasons
, to
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use
their phones.

To sum up, we could say that there are
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many
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reasons
for using
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phones
by
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teenagers
,
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but
they have
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different
rates.

IELTS academic The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

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3 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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