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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

To begin with, we have in front of a graph that describes the effect of various aspects as gender and age on music album sales in the market. It goes without saying as we can see that men have the upper hand over women when it come to the percentage where they buy more music albums than women. Over and above, the middle aged category from twenty five to thirty four years old leads in the purchasing race. In my opinion these numbers have nothing to do with music production, where music itself is classified into many types and each type targets a specific category that is classified either on gender or age. On the first hand, Teenagers are more attracted to hip hop music because it has more beats than word so that they can dance and experience fun in more ways rather than getting morals from word's wisdom. On the side, old people who are represented by our parents and grandparents prefer the old music sang by Abdelhalim and Om kalthom when words have deeper and more charming meaning than these days.
To
begin
with, we have in front of a graph that
describes
the effect of various aspects as gender and age on
music
album sales in the market. It goes without saying as we can
see
that
men
have the upper hand over women when it
come
to the percentage where they
buy
more
music
albums than women.

Over and above, the
middle aged
category from
twenty five
to
thirty four
years
old
leads in the purchasing race.

In my opinion these numbers have nothing to do with
music
production, where
music
itself
is classified
into
many
types and each type targets a specific category that
is classified
either on gender or age. On the
first
hand,
Teenagers
are more attracted to hip hop
music
because
it has more beats than word
so
that they can dance and experience fun in more ways
rather
than getting morals from word's wisdom. On the side,
old
people
who
are represented
by our parents and grandparents prefer the
old
music
sang by Abdelhalim and Om
kalthom
when words have deeper and more charming meaning than these days.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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3 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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