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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. yqy3
The given bar chart provides data on the proportion of females and males who passed their driving test in a nation of Asia area in four different years; 1980, 1990, 2000, and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of females dominated the total rate of people passed the driving test through all fours. Moreover, both the proportion of female and male witnessed an upward trend in the first three years. In 1980, about 48% was registered as the percentage of females, after which this figure was always over half of the total rate of people passed the driving test. To be more specific, the proportion of females went up marginally to 52% in 1990, and this was followed by reaching the highest point at nearly 70% before dipping to around 64% in the last period. Regarding males, for the first time, the percentage of the male was just under 30% which was the lowest point of the entire rate of both groups mentioned throughout the four years. This figure had a slight increase to 37% in 1990, after which the proportion climbed sharply to nearly 10% to 49% in 2000 and remained unchanged for the next ten years.
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given
bar chart provides data on the
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proportion
of
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females
and
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males
who passed their driving
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test
in a nation of Asia area in four
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different
years; 1980, 1990, 2000, and 2010.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the
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proportion
of
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females
dominated the total rate of
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people
passed the driving
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test
through all fours.
Moreover
, both the
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proportion
of
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female
and male witnessed an upward trend in the
first
three years.

In 1980, about 48%
was registered
as the percentage of
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females
, after which this figure was always over half of the total rate of
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people
passed the driving
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test
. To be more specific, the
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proportion
of
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females
went up
marginally
to 52% in 1990, and this
was followed
by reaching the highest point at
nearly
70%
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before
dipping to around 64% in the last period.

Regarding
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males
, for the
first
time, the percentage of the male was
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just
under 30% which was the lowest point of the entire rate of both groups mentioned throughout the four years. This figure had a slight increase to 37% in 1990, after which the
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proportion
climbed
sharply
to
nearly
10% to 49% in 2000 and remained unchanged for the
next
ten years.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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