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The chart shows the percentage of drugs taken by girls and boys in a school in New Zealand.

The chart shows the percentage of drugs taken by girls and boys in a school in New Zealand. 11OdG
The bar chart illustrates seven types of drugs taken by school children in New Zealand, divided by gender and displayed as percentages. Overall, it is immediately apparent hashish or marijuana is used more than any kind of drugs, whereas LSD and medical drugs are used at least. At first glance, we could see that boys take drugs more than girls for 6 out of 7 of the drugs listed. However, there is an equal number of girls and boys who take cocaine. To begin with, boys use more hashish or marijuana than girls at around 33% and 29% respectively. Following this, boys take heroin, opium, or morphine at approximately 8%, and girls just 5%. On the other hand, it is with ease to reveal the percentages for Amphetamines and Solvents are quite similar for both boys and girls, at 2% and 3% for girls and 4% for boys. In addition, the pattern for LSD and medical drugs is the same for both gender at 1% for girls and 3% for boys. Finally, both boys and girls take cocaine at the same level, 4%
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taken by school children in New Zealand, divided by gender and displayed as percentages.
Overall
, it is immediately apparent hashish or marijuana is
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used
more than any kind of
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drugs
, whereas LSD and medical
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drugs
are
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used
at least. At
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that
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boys
take
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more than
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girls
for 6 out of 7 of the
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drugs
listed.
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, there is an equal number of
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girls
and
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who take cocaine.

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boys
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more hashish or marijuana than
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girls
at around 33% and 29%
respectively
. Following this,
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boys
take heroin, opium, or morphine at approximately 8%, and
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girls
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5%.

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to reveal the percentages for Amphetamines and Solvents are quite similar for both
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boys
and
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, at 2% and 3% for
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girls
and 4% for
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boys
.
In addition
, the pattern for LSD and medical
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drugs
is the same for both gender at 1% for
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girls
and 3% for
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boys
.
Finally
, both
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and
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take cocaine at the same level, 4%
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IELTS academic The chart shows the percentage of drugs taken by girls and boys in a school in New Zealand.

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