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The chart shows the participation of 5-14 years old in selected leisure activities in UK

The chart shows the participation of 5-14 years old in selected leisure activities in UK PLnLg
The bar chart illustrates the involvement of children aged between 5 to 14 in a chosen recreational activities in UK. Overall, both boys and girls equally participated well in watching TV/ video, likewise the boys showed more involvement in pleasure activities than girls aside from art and craft, while the girls have less engagement in skateboarding/roller blading activities than boys. In electronic/ computer games, 80% of the boys were more actively participated than the girls with only 60%, and another activities that boys have higher 10% of involvement than girls with 60% is the bike riding. and also in skateboarding/roller blading the boys has 40% engagement than girls which was lower of 10%. Regarding activities of watching TV/ video, both boys and girls have equal ratio of 100% participation. While in art and craft activities, 60% of girls were highly engage, dominating the boys above 20%.
The bar chart illustrates the involvement of children aged
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between 5 to 14
in a chosen recreational
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activities
in UK.
Overall
, both
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boys
and
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girls
equally
participated well in watching TV/ video,
likewise
the
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boys
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showed
more involvement in pleasure
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activities
than
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girls
aside from art and craft, while the
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girls
have less engagement in skateboarding/roller
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blading
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activities
than
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boys
. In electronic/ computer games, 80% of the
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boys
were more
actively
participated than the
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girls
with
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only
60%, and another
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activities
that
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boys
have higher 10% of involvement than
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girls
with 60% is the bike riding.
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and
also
in skateboarding/roller
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blading
the
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boys
has 40% engagement than
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girls
which was lower of 10%. Regarding
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activities
of watching TV/ video, both
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boys
and
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girls
have equal ratio of 100% participation. While in art and craft
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activities
, 60% of
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girls
were
highly
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engage
, dominating the
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boys
above 20%.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the participation of 5-14 years old in selected leisure activities in UK

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