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The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010 7RAY
The given bar graph illustrates the spending of two countries on five durable goods in French and Great Britain by 2010. It can be clearly observed that people in uk spent about 400000 on cars, while the citizen of France outlay the little more than uk, which is about 45000000. Similarly the expenditure on books in uk was higher than France about 460 and 350 respectively. Overall it can be clear from graph that uk spent the maximum money on five consumer goods than France
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and Great Britain by 2010. It can be
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spent about 400000 on cars, while the citizen of France outlay the
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, which is about 45000000.
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Similarly
the expenditure on books in
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was higher than France about 460 and 350
respectively
.
Overall
it can be
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clear
from graph that
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spent the maximum money on five consumer
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France

IELTS academic The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

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