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The chart shows information about British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. The average age changed by percentage and years.

The chart shows information about British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. The average age changed by percentage and years. kxLx2
It can be seen that in 1990, over 40 % of British people between 36-50 years donated money to charity. While in 2010 over 35% of people by the age of 51-65 gave money to charity. This illustration of the chart shows that in both years, people from 18-50 who donated increased. Following the number of people who are below average, it can be seen that those by 18-25 donated less money. However, comparing this it reveals that still, those young people from 1990 gave more money, about 17% in comparison to the people from 2010 who donated below 10%. In 1990 and 2010, regarding the percentage scale, the number of people who gave money are those between 36-65, which is above 30 % of the total of 45%. Overall, the chart demonstrates that young people are not as interested in donating money to charity as older people. However, there are not many differences between the age range for the years 1990 and 2010 only in some cases.
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to charity.
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by the age of 51-65 gave
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to charity. This illustration of the chart
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that in both years,
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from 18-50
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donated
increased. Following the number of
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people
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are below average, it can be
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that those by 18-25
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donated
less
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.
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, comparing this it reveals that
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, those young
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from 1990 gave more
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, about 17%
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to the
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people
from 2010
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who
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donated
below 10%.

In 1990 and 2010, regarding the percentage scale, the number of
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people
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gave
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money
are those between 36-65, which is above 30 % of the total of 45%.

Overall
, the chart demonstrates that young
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people
are not as interested in donating
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to charity as older
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.
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differences between the age range for the years 1990 and 2010
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IELTS academic The chart shows information about British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. The average age changed by percentage and years.

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