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DESCRIBE THE RAINY DAY THAT YOU CAN REMEMBER.

DESCRIBE THE RAINY DAY THAT YOU CAN REMEMBER. JV3VB
It was on a day of May, I don’t remember precisely that date though. The day after such a long time that not only me but also all of us longed it to come on, so that’s why I can remember it clearest. Because in dry season, having rainy day is such hard that we have to pray for it. After many times we had entreated God for a downpour, it didn’t fall any single drop. We had gone down and lost hopefulness on begging God, just been in the mercy of God. But on that day, a torrential rain poured down our place. I remembered vividly how happy we were, all of us ran out to playground, held hands of each other to circle and jump up and down joyfully. Too much to bad, you know, the rain had been being almost a week. Unfortunately, my house was lower than other so water had come into my house. Gosh! Turning the table, now then my family all begged God for stopping raining. But we got my neighborhood behind my back, they helped us to lift furniture, splashed water out. Until it had stopped raining, they still give us a hand to clean the house. So thankful to get this question for I can look back that time say thanks again to our neighbors.
It was on a day of May, I don’t remember
precisely
that date though. The day after such a long time that not
only
me
but
also
all of us longed it to
come
on,
so
that’s why I can remember it clearest.

Because
in dry season, having rainy day is such
hard
that we
have to
pray for it. After
many
times we had entreated God for a downpour, it didn’t fall any single drop. We had gone down and lost hopefulness on begging God,
just
been in the mercy of God.
But
on that day, a torrential rain poured down our place. I remembered
vividly
how happy we were, all of us ran out to playground, held hands of each other to circle and jump up and down
joyfully
.

Too much to
bad
, you know, the rain had been being almost a week. Unfortunately, my
house
was lower than other
so
water had
come
into my
house
. Gosh! Turning the table,
now
then my family all begged God for stopping raining.
But
we
got
my neighborhood behind my back, they
helped
us to lift furniture, splashed water out. Until it had
stopped
raining, they
still
give us a hand to clean the
house
.

So
thankful to
get
this question for I can look back that time say thanks again to our neighbors.
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IELTS academic DESCRIBE THE RAINY DAY THAT YOU CAN REMEMBER.

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4 paragraphs
224 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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