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the chart show the expenditure on six consumer goods in 2015

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The provided bar graph compares the spending of European people in six consumer products. As is presented in the bar graph, British people spent more on all the consumer products than the citizens of other European countries given here. For the photographic film British citizens spent over 170 thousand pound sterling which was the highest amount among the given product categories. While their spending was about 170 thousand pound sterling for toys, they spent over 160 thousand pound sterling for the CDs and perfumes. For the Tennis racquets and personal stereos their spending was nearly 155 thousand. On the other hand, French people also spend their largest amount on photographic films (about 165 thousand pound sterling) while they spent less than 160 thousand on Toys and CDs. Their spending on perfume, tennis racquets and stereos were about 145 thousand. A similar spending trend can be observed among Italian people but they spent less in all of the categories compared to the citizens of Britain and France. On the contrary, German people seems like spent lowest on the given consumer products and their spending pattern was different from people of other 3 countries. Their spending on stereo, tennis racquets and CDs was about 150 thousand pound sterling while their spending on other products were comparatively less. They spent the least amount on photographic films and Toys in contrary to British, French and Germans.
The provided bar graph compares the
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in six consumer products.

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more on all the consumer
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products
than the citizens of
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other
European countries
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here. For the photographic film British citizens
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spent
over 170 thousand pound
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sterling
which was the highest amount among the
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given
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product
categories. While their
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spending
was about 170 thousand pound
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sterling
for toys, they
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over 160 thousand pound
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sterling
for the CDs and perfumes. For the Tennis racquets and personal stereos their
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spending
was
nearly
155 thousand. On the
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hand, French
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people
also
spend their largest amount on photographic films (about 165 thousand pound
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sterling)
while they
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less than 160 thousand on Toys and CDs. Their
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spending
on perfume, tennis racquets and stereos were about 145 thousand.

A similar
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trend can
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among Italian
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people
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they
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less in
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all of the
categories compared to the citizens of Britain and France.
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, German
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lowest
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consumer
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and their
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pattern was
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from
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3 countries. Their
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spending
on stereo, tennis racquets and CDs was about 150 thousand pound
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sterling
while their
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spending
on
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other
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were
comparatively
less. They
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spent
the least amount on photographic films and Toys in contrary to British, French and Germans.

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