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the diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods

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The diagram demonstrates the sequence of consumer goods manufacturing and the feedback system. Overall, the process consists of ten different stages. At the first stage of the process, raw materials and manufactured components are collected in storage. Secondly, product research creates a design and both are involved in the production planning stage. After that, products pass a series of steps that include assembly, inspection and testing. After approval of the testing the next stap is packing. Consequently, after packing, finished products are dispatched for sales to consumers. If something goes wrong after saling, there is feedback from the production planning stage in order to fix the mistakes. Also sales provides the feedback to market research that in turn provides evaluation to advertisement and packaging. Finally, if there is any problem with design then it is sent to the design stage from the market research and testing step
The diagram demonstrates the sequence of consumer
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goods
manufacturing and the feedback system.
Overall
, the process consists of ten
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different
stages.

At the
first
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stage
of the process, raw materials and manufactured components
are collected
in storage.
Secondly
, product research creates a design and both
are involved
in the production planning
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stage
. After that, products pass a series of steps that include assembly, inspection and testing.
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After
approval of the testing the
next
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stap
is packing.
Consequently
, after packing, finished products
are dispatched
for sales to consumers.

If something goes
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wrong
after
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saling
, there is feedback from the production planning
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stage
in order to
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fix
the mistakes.
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Also
sales provides the feedback to market research that in turn provides evaluation to advertisement and packaging.
Finally
, if there is any problem with design then it is
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sent
to the design
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stage
from the market research and testing step

IELTS academic the diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods

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  American English
3 paragraphs
146 words
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