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The chart on the left shows the percentage of British adults drinking more than the recommended guidelines on at least one day in the week in 2004. The graph on the right shows the average alcohol consumption of children in England, aged 11-15, who drank in the last week (1990-2004).

The chart on the left shows the percentage of British adults drinking more than the recommended guidelines on at least one day in the week in 2004. The graph on the right shows the average alcohol consumption of children in England, aged 11-15, who drank in the last week (1990-2004). 2lyw6
both charts show the amount of alcohol consumption of males and females in the UK. The bar chart illustrates, the difference in drinking between men and women in 2004, while the line graph provides information about the number of alcohol units consumed by girls and boys between 1990 and 2004. The first chart depicts that nearly 50 percent of men consumed alcohol more than the recommended guidelines in age 16-44 although for women aged 16-24 the number was also relatively high 39%, the figure for females aged 24-64 were approximately half to compare males. In addition, the consumption of alcohol for both gender in age 65 and over were the lowest amount. The second chart reveals that the average alcohol consumption for both girls and boys had increased steadily since 1990. However, in 1994 the alcohol usage suddenly rose to 5 and 7 per unit for girls and boys respectively. After that, for girls, the figure was gradual growth and hit a high of nearly 10 units in 2004 in contrast for boys the figure steadily increased since 1994 and in 2000 there was a slow decline until 2004.
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consumption of males and females in the UK. The bar
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illustrates, the difference in drinking between
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and women in 2004, while the line graph provides information about the number of
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units consumed by
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between 1990 and 2004.

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depicts that
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consumed
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more than the recommended guidelines in age 16-44 although for women aged 16-24 the number was
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high 39%, the figure for females aged 24-64 were approximately half to compare males.
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, the consumption of
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for both gender in age 65 and over were the lowest amount.

The second
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reveals that the average
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alcohol
consumption for both
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girls
and
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boys
had increased
steadily
since 1990.
However
, in 1994 the
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usage
suddenly
rose to 5 and 7 per unit for
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and
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respectively
. After that, for
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, the figure was gradual growth and hit a high of
nearly
10 units in 2004
in contrast
for
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the figure
steadily
increased since 1994 and in 2000 there was a slow decline until 2004.

IELTS academic The chart on the left shows the percentage of British adults drinking more than the recommended guidelines on at least one day in the week in 2004. The graph on the right shows the average alcohol consumption of children in England, aged 11-15, who drank in the last week (1990-2004).

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