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The chart illustrates the percentage of the changing rates of three various kinds of crime in Newport city center between 2003 and 2012.

The chart illustrates the percentage of the changing rates of three various kinds of crime in Newport city center between 2003 and 2012. 70g9Y
Overall, the total amount of burglary has been decreased significantly, whereas, in 2012 car theft and robbery cases were the same as the beginning of survey in Newport city. To begin with, as chart demonstrates burglary was the most common one among other crimes at just below 3500 in 2003. This number experienced noticeable growth around 3800 during a year. However, the rates of burglary incidents decreased dramatically reaching approximately 1100 in 2008. This figure showed an upward trend in the next year, which remained constant over the next 4 years staying just beneath 1500 in the end of survey. In the meantime, robbery accounted for around 2800 at the beginning of chart, which stayed constant over the period of 3 years. However, the rates of robbery experienced an abrupt decrease to just almost 2000 in 2006. This number fluctuated during 3 years, after increasing to above 2500. In 2012 the number of robbery incidents in the inner city stayed around 2700 at the end of survey. On the other hand car theft was the least changed crime in Newport city, which also the lowest proportion of the chart. This crime area was at 600 at the beginning, after several fluctuation number stayed stable in 2012 as 2003
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, the total amount of burglary has
been decreased
significantly
, whereas, in 2012 car theft and
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robbery
cases were the same as the beginning of survey in Newport city.

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with, as chart demonstrates burglary was the most common one among other crimes at
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below 3500 in 2003. This
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experienced noticeable growth around 3800 during a
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.
However
, the rates of burglary incidents decreased
dramatically
reaching approximately 1100 in 2008. This figure
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showed
an upward trend in the
next
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, which remained constant over the
next
4 years staying
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beneath 1500 in the
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end
of survey.

In the meantime,
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robbery
accounted for around 2800 at the beginning of chart, which stayed constant over the period of 3 years.
However
, the rates of
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experienced an abrupt decrease to
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almost 2000 in 2006. This
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number
fluctuated during 3 years, after increasing to above 2500. In 2012 the
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of
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robbery
incidents in the inner city stayed around 2700 at the
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end
of survey.
On the other hand
car theft was the least
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changed
crime in Newport city, which
also
the lowest proportion of the chart. This crime area was at 600 at the beginning, after several fluctuation
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stayed stable in 2012 as 2003

IELTS academic The chart illustrates the percentage of the changing rates of three various kinds of crime in Newport city center between 2003 and 2012.

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