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The chart illustrates about the changes in three different of cases in Manchester city centre between 2003 to 2012.

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The chart illustrates about the changes in three different of cases in Manchester city centre between 2003 to 2012. Overall, Burglary in Manchester city centre has decreased significantly in a decade. Meanwhile, Car Theft was increased gradually. In 2004 the issue of Bulglary in Manchester city centre was the higher rather than other crime, in around 4000 cases but it was hit a low of 1000 in 2008. After that, the cases bounced back slightly with approximately 1000 cases in 2012. On the other hand, car theft cases in Manchester city center stood in around 500 cases in 2003, and it was fluctuated in 2008 around 2000. But it increased gradually hovering in 2800 in 2012. Apart from that there is the robery issue which is remain steady with approximately 500 cases in the end of the data.
The chart illustrates about the
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changes
in three
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different
of cases in Manchester city
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centre
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between 2003 to 2012
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Overall
, Burglary in Manchester city
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centre
has decreased
significantly
in a decade. Meanwhile, Car Theft
was increased
gradually
.

In 2004 the issue of
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Bulglary
in Manchester city
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centre
was the higher
rather
than other crime, in around 4000 cases
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but
it
was hit
a low of 1000 in 2008. After that, the cases bounced back
slightly
with approximately 1000 cases in 2012.

On the other hand
, car theft cases in Manchester city center stood in around 500 cases in 2003, and it
was fluctuated
in 2008 around 2000.
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But
it increased
gradually
hovering in 2800 in 2012. Apart from that there is the
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robery
issue which is
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remain
steady with approximately 500 cases in the
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end
of the data.
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IELTS academic The chart illustrates about the changes in three different of cases in Manchester city centre between 2003 to 2012.

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