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The chart given illustrates the number of travelers in millions that are using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart given illustrates the number of travelers in millions that are using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. brL9Q
Overall, the total of travelers for both airports, John F. Kennedy and LaGuardia has increased in the given period of time but with vacillations. Whereas there is a gradual upsurge in number of travelers using Newark airport over the period of time. Moreover, the soar of travelers is highest at LaGuardia airport and lowest at John F. Kennedy airport in the given years. Firstly, starting with approximately 25 million travelers at John F. Kennedy airport in 1995, it was uplifted to nearly 50 million in 1997. But in 1998 it showed a moderate fall to almost 30 million travelers. But after that it started increasing and was approximately 45 million in 2000. Secondly, the number of travelers at LaGuardia was close to 50 million in 1995, which showed quite fluctuation till 1999 but in 2000 there was a sudden rise to approximately 70 millions from 50 million in 1999. In the similar manner, number of travelers at Newark was lowest amongst the three in 1995 with only 18 million travelers, but with the passage of time, it showed a gradual increase and was almost 40 million in 2000.
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, the total of
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travelers
for both
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airports
, John F. Kennedy and LaGuardia has increased in the
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given
period of time
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but
with vacillations.
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there is a gradual upsurge in number of
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travelers
using Newark
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airport
over the period of time.
Moreover
, the soar of
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travelers
is highest at LaGuardia
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airport
and lowest at John F. Kennedy
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airport
in the
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given
years.

Firstly
, starting with approximately 25
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million
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travelers
at John F. Kennedy
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airport
in 1995, it
was uplifted
to
nearly
50
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million
in 1997.
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But
in 1998 it
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showed
a moderate fall to almost 30
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million
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travelers
.
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But
after that it
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started
increasing and was approximately 45
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million
in 2000.

Secondly
, the number of
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travelers
at LaGuardia was close to 50
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million
in 1995, which
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showed
quite fluctuation till 1999
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but
in 2000 there was a sudden rise to approximately 70
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millions
from 50
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million
in 1999. In the similar manner, number of
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travelers
at Newark was lowest amongst the three in 1995 with
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only
18
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million
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travelers
,
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but
with the passage of time, it
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showed
a gradual increase and was almost 40
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million
in 2000.
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IELTS academic The chart given illustrates the number of travelers in millions that are using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

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