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Bar chart of average monthly revenue from retail telecommunication subscribers

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The bar chart shows the average monthly revenue from retail telecommunication subscribers from eight countries in North America, Europe, Asia and Oceania. Each country is represented by three bars: green for mobile, brown for data, and blue for services. In practically all cases, services represent the highest revenue source per client, followed by data and lastly mobile. Australia has the highest revenue per customer for services at $109, however overall Japan has the highest revenue per customer because data and mobile revenues are considerably higher than in the other countries. Italy has the lowest revenue figures overall, with mobile revenue at $16, data at $44, and services at $51. The North American figures are broadly similar, both countries reach around $90 for services, $65 for data and between $53-$44 for mobile. The UK, Germany and France have similar figures except France has the highest data revenue for the European countries. The lowest revenue figures are found in Europe, the highest are in Asia, namely Japan, while North American revenue numbers are in the middle.
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the average monthly
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revenue
from retail telecommunication subscribers from eight countries in North America, Europe, Asia and Oceania. Each country
is represented
by three bars: green for mobile, brown for
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data
, and blue for services.

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services
represent the highest
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revenue
source per client, followed by
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data
and
lastly
mobile. Australia has the highest
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per customer for
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services
at $109,
however
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Japan has the highest
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per customer
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data
and mobile
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are
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Italy has the lowest
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figures
overall
, with mobile
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at $16,
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data
at $44, and
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services
at $51. The North American
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are
broadly
similar, both countries reach around $90 for
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services
, $65 for
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data
and between $53-$44 for mobile. The UK, Germany and France have similar
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except France has the highest
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data
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for the European countries.

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are found
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numbers are in the middle.
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IELTS academic Bar chart of average monthly revenue from retail telecommunication subscribers

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