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The chart compares the percentage of electrical appliances owned, while the second

The chart compares the percentage of electrical appliances owned, while the second 6N568
The chart compares the percentage of electrical appliances owned, while the second chart represents the time spent on housework per week in a time period of 99 years, starting from 1920. Overall, The aggregate of Appliances such as refrigerator and vacuum cleaner observed a positive trend followed by a plateu at the end of the period. The number of hours spent per week decreased with an increase in years. To begin with, The ratio of washing machines and vacuums were at a simlar level, with a marginal difference of 10%. Though, The percentage of people who owned refrigerator was null in 1920, it overtook the other appliances by the year 1960. Between the years 2000-2019 the ownership figures of these two machines were equal in numbers. The changes in washing machine ownership were not as significant as the others. The ratio was 40% in 1920, it rose to 65% by the end period. In terms of hours of work per week, in 1920 the hours spent per week were 50 hours, a steady downfall was observed until the year 1960, falling to 20 hours per week. Hereafter, Until the year 2019, the hours of housework per week decreased by 10 hours, coming to only 10 hours of work associated per week for households.
The chart compares the percentage of electrical

appliances
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owned
, while the second chart represents

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the
time spent on housework per
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week
in a time period

of 99 years, starting from 1920.

Overall
, The aggregate of Appliances such as refrigerator and

vacuum cleaner observed a
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positive
trend followed by a
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plateu


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at
the
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end
of the period. The number of
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hours


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spent
per
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week
decreased with an increase in years.

To
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begin
with, The ratio of washing machines and vacuums

were at a
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simlar
level, with a marginal difference of

10%.
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Though
, The percentage of
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people
who
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owned
refrigerator

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was
null in 1920, it overtook the other appliances by the
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year 1960
. Between the years 2000-2019 the
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ownership


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figures
of these two machines were equal in numbers.

The
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changes
in washing machine ownership were

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not
as significant as the others. The ratio
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was


40% in 1920, it rose to 65% by the
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end
period.

In terms of
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hours
of work per
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week
, in 1920 the hours

spent per
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week
were 50
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hours
, a steady downfall

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was
observed until the
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year
1960, falling to 20 hours

per
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week
. Hereafter, Until the
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year
2019, the hours

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of
housework per
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week
decreased by 10
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hours
, coming to

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only
10
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hours
of work associated per
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week
for households.
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