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The line graph illustrates contentment of students from the in four different colleges in the given period of 12 years.

The line graph illustrates contentment of students from the in four different colleges in the given period of 12 years. 8a8Jw
The line graph illustrates contentment of students from the in four different colleges in the given period of 12 years. In an overview the line graph shows that there were many rise and fall in the percentage of students' satisfaction. But college A and D sinked and college B and C reached its peek in the year 2002. According to the graph college A had approximately 62% satisfaction right but over the period it gradually According to the graph college A had approximately 62% satisfaction rate. But over the period it gradually dropped with minor rise in between few years. College D had 38% in 1991 and there was a minimal jump of 3% in 1992. Thereafter with a subsequent fall to 20% in 2002. In 1991 college B and C had 29% and 51% rate. College B had regular ups and downs till 1997. Thereafter remained constant till 1999 and then a regular rise of 1% each year for the next three years. College C had 29% satisfaction rate till 1992 a drop of 3% in 1993 was noticed which remained stable till 1995. Where as continuous fall till 1998 upto 10% was seen and then sudden jump to 69% and gradually increased to to 80% by 2002.
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illustrates contentment of students from the in four
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period of 12 years.

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satisfaction
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college A and D
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sinked
and college B and C reached its peek in the
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2002.

According to the
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college A had approximately 62%
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satisfaction
right
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over the period it
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According to the
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college A had approximately 62%
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satisfaction
rate.
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But
over the period it
gradually
dropped with minor rise in between few years. College D had 38% in 1991 and there was a minimal jump of 3% in 1992.
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Thereafter
with a subsequent fall to 20% in 2002.

In 1991 college B and C had 29% and 51% rate. College B had regular ups and downs till 1997.
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remained constant till 1999 and then a regular rise of 1% each
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for the
next
three years. College C had 29%
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satisfaction
rate till 1992 a drop of 3% in 1993
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which remained stable till 1995.
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continuous fall till 1998
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and then sudden jump to 69% and
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increased
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