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The line graph illustrates the average amount of money spent yearly on mobile phones, national and international landline phones in the US over a period of 9 years.

The line graph illustrates the average amount of money spent yearly on mobile phones, national and international landline phones in the US over a period of 9 years. VlVwm
It is clear that while the yearly spending on mobile phones increased significantly, the opposite was true for national landline phone expenditure. Also, the figure for international fixed-line service was lowest during the period. In 2001, there was an average of nearly $700 spent on national landline phones by US residents, in comparison with only around $200 each on mobile phones and international landline services. Over the next five years, the average amount poured into national fixed-line phones fell by approximately $200. By constrast, yearly spending on cell phones witnessed a significant increase of roughly $300. At the same time, the figure for overseas landline services fluctuated slightly below $300. In 2006, US consumers spent the same amount of money on mobile and national fixed-line services, with just over $500 on each. From the year 2006 onwards, it can be seen that the average yearly expenditure on mobile phones surpassed that on national fixed-line phones and mobile phones became the most common means of communication. To be specific, yearly spending on mobile phone services increased to nearly $750 in the last year, while the figure for national landline phone ones decreased to about $400 at the end of the period. During the same period, there was a stability in the figure for overseas phone calls.
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that while the yearly spending on mobile
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increased
significantly
, the opposite was true

for
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national
landline
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phone
expenditure.
Also
, the
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figure
for international
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fixed
-line service was lowest

during the period.

In 2001, there was an average of
nearly
$700 spent on
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national
landline
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phones
by US residents, in

comparison with
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only
around $200 each on mobile
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phones
and international landline services. Over the

next
five years, the average amount poured into
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national
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fixed
-line
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phones
fell by approximately $200.

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, yearly spending on cell
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phones
witnessed a significant increase of roughly $300. At the

same time, the
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figure
for overseas landline services fluctuated
slightly
below $300.

In 2006, US consumers spent the same amount of money on mobile and
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national
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fixed
-line services,

with
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over $500 on each. From the year 2006 onwards, it can be
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seen
that the average yearly

expenditure on mobile
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phones
surpassed that on
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national
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fixed
-line
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phones
and mobile
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phones
became

the most common means of communication. To be specific, yearly spending on mobile
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phone
services

increased to
nearly
$750 in the last year, while the
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figure
for
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national
landline
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phone
ones decreased to

about $400 at the
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end
of the period. During the same period, there was a stability in the
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figure
for

overseas
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phone
calls.
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