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THE CHART BELOW THE CHANGING OF ISLAND

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A glance at he diagrams illustrate a number of changes which took place in a island thank to the advancement of tourism. It is apparent from the information supplied that the subsequent decades, the island which is an un-spoilt place was surrounded by the sea; with one to the north, the other at the bottom of island. Furthermore the beach was located to the south-west. The most notable change was the construction tourists services surrounding in the island. Based on the needed the tourism, the accommodation was in close proximity to the reception which was constructed in the middle of the island. The restaurant was erected on the north of reception. these structure was connected by the footpath in order to enable tourists to commute to beach and sea. The sea which was located on the south of island was replaced by a pier which allow traveler to have more outdoor activities by boats.
A glance at he diagrams illustrate a number of
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changes
which took place in a
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island
thank to the advancement of tourism.

It is apparent from the information supplied that the subsequent decades, the
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island
which is an
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un-spoilt
place
was surrounded
by the sea; with one to the north, the other at the bottom of
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island
.
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Furthermore
the beach
was located
to the south-west.

The most notable
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change
was the construction tourists services surrounding in the
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island
. Based on the needed the tourism, the accommodation was in
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close proximity
to the reception which
was constructed
in the middle of the
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island
. The restaurant
was erected
on the north of reception.
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these
structure
was connected
by the footpath in order to enable tourists to commute to beach and sea. The sea which
was located
on the south of
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island
was replaced
by a pier which
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allow
traveler to have more outdoor activities by boats.
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IELTS academic THE CHART BELOW THE CHANGING OF ISLAND

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
154 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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