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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

The given statistics illustrates exports of a nation in various product sectors with the economic gain yielded and also, shows the percentage changes in each of them. This data is from the years 2015 and 2016. All in all, all the categories have increased their export values whereas, gems and jewellery has see a down trend. Textiles trade demonstrated a considerable increase in popularity which attracted a huge demand for export in 2016. Firstly, petroleum products followed by engineering goods have retained its first and second place as top two best products being exported in 2016 as well as in 2015 with a raise of 3% and 8. 5% respectively. Whereas, they brought in little higher than 60 billion and below 50 billion dollars in 2015. Secondly, although, textiles has increased its margin by 15. 24%, along with agricultural products which has a very minimal raise (0. 81%) are the only exported products with less than 35 billion dollars profit in both the years (in 2015 less than 30$ and over 30$ in 2016 for textile industries whereas, agricultural products benefited only around 30$). On the other hand, despite attracting over 40 billion dollars initially the popularity went down by about 5. 18% which accounted only approximately 40$ billions
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in each of them. This data is from the years 2015 and 2016.

All in all, all the categories have increased their export values whereas, gems and
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a down trend. Textiles trade demonstrated a considerable increase in popularity which attracted a huge demand for export in 2016.

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followed by engineering
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in 2016 for textile industries whereas, agricultural
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

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