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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015. X6K8
The given figures illustrate about a nation’s export earning in five categories in 2015 and 2016. Overall, it is noticeable that according to bar chart revenues in all categories except gems and jewellery increased in the given period while the table shows that the most significant growth in textile industries. To begin with the bar chart, export earning from petroleum products recorded as $61 billion which was about double of agricultural products and textile in 2015 and they followed the same trend in 2016 amounting for $63billion which was an increased of 3%, 32 billion dollars and textile industries with 32billion dollars which increased export income by 15. 24 % respectively. Furthermore, Earning from engineered goods inclined to $61 billion in 2016 from $58 billion in 2015 and income from these goods went up by 8. 5%. Finally, the only decline in revenue occurred in the gems and jewellery products group, where export earnings dropped by 5% to approximately $40 billion in 2016.
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figures illustrate about a nation’s
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earning
in five categories in 2015 and 2016.

Overall
, it is noticeable that according to bar chart revenues in all categories except gems and
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jewellery
increased in the
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period while the table
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that the most significant growth in textile industries.

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with the bar chart,
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export
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earning
from petroleum products recorded as $61
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billion
which was about double of agricultural products and textile in
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2015 and
they followed the same trend in 2016 amounting for
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$63billion
which was an increased of 3%, 32
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billion
dollars and textile industries with
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32billion
dollars which increased
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export
income by 15. 24 %
respectively
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Furthermore
,
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Earning
from engineered
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goods
inclined to $61
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billion
in 2016 from $58
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billion
in 2015 and income from these
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goods
went up by 8. 5%.
Finally
, the
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decline in revenue occurred in the gems and
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jewellery
products group, where
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export
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earnings
dropped by 5% to approximately $40
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billion
in 2016.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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