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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below. You should write at least 150 words.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below. y2EM
The graphs indicate a university lecturer on various diseases. Overall, when we look at the grapps, it shows the illnesses have got some differences from each other. A number of sicknesses have increased, whilss others have decreased. First disease is AIDS. It is obvious shown that deaths because of that disease were just about 0. 2 million people. Second illnes is Leprosy. The deayhe due to this sickness in Someland were approximately 0. 1 million people. Third disease were Tropical Diseases. According to tbr deaths in 1990 because of this disease were around 0. 3 million people. Fourth sickness is Diarrhoea, the deaths from that illness were exactly 0. 5 million people by 1990. Fifith disease is Malaria. Deaths due to Malaria were almost 0. 4 million people. Sixth and the last sickness is TB. The number of deaths were nearly 1. 7 million peoplez because of this disease. When it come to Medical research funding in Someland against these ilnesses. It seems AIDS is the fist sickness for the Medical research funding with around 170 million. Leprosy was approximately 70 million. Tropical Diseases were slightly differ from Leprosy with around 68 million. Although, the Medical research funding was not very well on Malaria disease. It was still not kill people more. The research funding was precisely 50 million and finally the last one is TB. The most deaths were because of TB. The graph shows the less Medical research funding was on TB which is the reason of deaths due to this sickness. However it was not equal to 0. It was around 0. 3 million.
The graphs indicate a university lecturer on various diseases.

Overall
, when we look at the
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grapps
, it
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shows
the illnesses have
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got
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some
differences from each other. A number of
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sicknesses
have increased,
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whilss
others have decreased.

First
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disease
is AIDS. It is obvious shown that deaths
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because
of that
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disease
were
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just
about 0. 2
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million
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people
.

Second
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illnes
is Leprosy. The
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deayhe
due to this
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sickness
in
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Someland
were approximately 0. 1
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million
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people
. Third
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disease
were Tropical
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Diseases
. According to
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tbr
deaths in 1990
because of this
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disease
were
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around
0. 3
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million
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people
. Fourth
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sickness
is
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Diarrhoea
, the deaths from that illness were exactly 0. 5
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million
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people
by 1990.
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Fifith
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disease
is Malaria. Deaths due to Malaria were almost 0. 4
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million
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people
. Sixth and the last
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sickness
is TB. The number of deaths were
nearly
1. 7
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million
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peoplez
because of this
disease.

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When
it
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come
to
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Medical
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research
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funding
in
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Someland
against these
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ilnesses
. It seems AIDS is the fist
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sickness
for the
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Medical
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research
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funding
with
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around
170
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million
. Leprosy was approximately 70
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million
. Tropical
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Diseases
were
slightly
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differ
from Leprosy with
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around
68
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million
.
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Although
, the
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Medical
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research
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funding
was not
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very
well on Malaria
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disease
. It was
still
not kill
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people
more. The
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research
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funding
was
precisely
50
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million
and
finally
the last one is TB. The most deaths were
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because
of TB.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
graph
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shows
the less
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Medical
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research
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funding
was on TB which is the reason of deaths due to this
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sickness
.
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However
it was not equal to 0. It was
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around
0. 3
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million
.
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IELTS academic Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below.

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267 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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