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The chart below shows the percentage of population aged 65 and over in three countries in 1980, 2000 and predicted percentage in 2030.

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The chart given illustrates data regarding the rate of residents aged 65 or over in three separate years 1980, 2000 and forecasts in the year 2030. Looking at the bar chart, it is immediately obvious that an upward trend is projected to be recorded in the proportion of those 65+ years old in all three countries. Another chief feature is that the population of Germany aged 65+ in 2030 will register the highest figure of the table. In the first year examined, those 65+ years old in Canada accounted for 10% and there was a remarkable increase witnessed in this figure by 2000 before it is forecasted to be up to around 25% by 2030. A similar upward tendency will be recorded in the inhabitants aged 65+ in Germany. Starting from 15% in 1980, this percentage experienced a noticeable increase of 5% prior to being predicted to reach 25% by 2030. In 1980, the proportion of dwellers aged 65+ in the UK comprised less than 15%. A stable stability was experienced in this figure, followed by it being projected to reach north of 15% by the last year studied.
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illustrates data regarding the rate of residents
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aged
65 or over in three separate years 1980, 2000 and forecasts in the
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2030.

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in the proportion of those 65+ years
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in all three countries. Another chief feature is that the population of Germany
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65+ in 2030 will register the highest figure of the table.

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examined, those 65+ years
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in Canada accounted for 10% and there was a remarkable increase witnessed in this figure by 2000
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to be up to around 25% by 2030. A similar upward tendency will
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in the inhabitants
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65+ in Germany. Starting from 15% in 1980, this percentage experienced a noticeable increase of 5% prior to
being predicted
to reach 25% by 2030.

In 1980, the proportion of dwellers
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65+ in the UK comprised less than 15%. A stable stability
was experienced
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being projected
to reach north of 15% by the last
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studied.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of population aged 65 and over in three countries in 1980, 2000 and predicted percentage in 2030.

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