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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

I strongly agree that it is important to enjoy your work, even if it means that you earn less money. Altought there are disadvantages in having a less income, the positives of having pleasure during work outweigh the negatives. It is my firm believe that enjoy your work is essential for a number of reasons, which I will explain in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, salary should not be the only reason why you choose a job. Of course, it is important to find a job that enables you to pay your bills. However, I think that there are others aspects of the job that should be considered, such as motivation. My experience has taught me that to feel happy about what you are doing is more valuable than to have a better income. Some years ago, I was working to a hotel which paid me very well, but I did not like the functions that I was doing there. In the begining I was happy, because I was also spending more money in lesure. But, after some months, I noticed that I was unhappy to work. I was always feeling tired and going to work was a terrible moment for me. So, I quit my job and I started to work to a company where I could work as a bartender, the job that I love and I further see my self working in the future. There my salary was lower, but I was always very excited to go to work. If I did not had change the workplace, I never would had the experience of having pleasure at the function that I do. Moreover, there are many psychology's theories that afirms that when you like what you do, you are healthier and other aspects of your life also goes better because of this. So, I personally, believe that when you are able to develop functions which you have desire, you will be able to feel more energetic, creative and you can do even better what you supposed to do. A friend of mine really enjoys working as a receptionist. So, she found a job that suits with her desire and after few months she was so good at doing this. She could find creative and great forms of solving problems, dealing with systems and people. She explains that it was possible just because she likes what she does and because of this she also have more quality and relaxing time outside work. To conclude it, it is not possible to find pleasure, keep motivated and have a good life outside work if you are not happy about what you are developing at work.
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to enjoy your
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, even if it means that you earn less money.
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there are disadvantages in having a less income, the positives of having pleasure during
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work
outweigh the negatives. It is my firm believe that enjoy your
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work
is essential for a number of reasons, which I will
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explain
in the subsequent paragraphs.

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begin
with, salary should not be the
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only
reason why you choose a
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job
.
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, it is
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important
to find a
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job
that enables you to pay your bills.
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, I
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think
that there are others aspects of the
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job
that should
be considered
, such as motivation. My experience has taught me that to feel happy about what you are doing is more valuable than to have a better income.
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years ago, I was working to a hotel which paid me
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very
well,
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but
I did not like the functions that I was doing there. In the
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begining
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I was
also
spending more money in
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lesure
.
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, after
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some
months, I noticed that I was unhappy to
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work
. I was always feeling tired and going to
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work
was a terrible moment for me.
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, I quit my
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and I
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to
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to a
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company
where I could
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as a bartender, the
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that I
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love and
I
further
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my self working in the future. There my salary was lower,
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but
I was always
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very
excited to go to
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work
. If I did not
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had
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change
the workplace, I never would
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had
the experience of having pleasure at the function that I do.

Moreover
, there are
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many
psychology's theories that
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afirms
that when you like what you do, you are healthier and other aspects of your life
also
goes better
because of this
.
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So
, I
personally
, believe that when you are able to develop functions which you have desire, you will be able to feel more energetic,
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creative and
you can do even better what you supposed to do. A friend of mine
really
enjoys working as a receptionist.
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So
, she found a
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job
that suits with her desire and after few months she was
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so
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good
at doing this. She could find creative and great forms of solving problems, dealing with systems and
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people
. She
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explains
that it was possible
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just
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she likes what she does and
because of this
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also
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have
more quality and relaxing time outside work.

To conclude
it, it is not possible to find pleasure,
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keep
motivated and have a
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good
life outside
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work
if you are not happy about what you are developing at
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.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

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