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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education

The bar chart compares the amount of girls per 100 boys admitted in three different education category in 1990 and 1998. It is clear that tertiary education was most pupils admitted in developed countries between 1990 and 1998 while developing countries was lowest pupils admitted in over the 8 years period. In 1990, developed countries were 105 and then it increased to 112 while developing countries were increased 9% over the some time in the tertiary education. However, in the secondary education, developed countries and developing countries went up 1% and 10% respectively. Developing countries were 83% and then it rose to 4% between 1990 and 1998 while developed countries is grow up mildly 1% in primary education in 1990 and 1998.

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different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdisciplineinformationtrainingsciencestudyschooling
education
Possible agreement error. The noun ‘category’ seems to be countable, so consider using: “categories”.categories
category
 in 1990 and 1998.

It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that tertiary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdisciplineinformationtrainingsciencestudyschooling
education
 was most pupils admitted in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedadvanced
developed
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countries
 between 1990 and 1998 while developing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 was A determiner is probably missing here: “the lowest”.the lowest
lowest
 pupils admitted in over the 8 years period.

In 1990, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedadvanced
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 were Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).105, and
105 and
 then it increased to 112 while developing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
were increased
 9% over the Did you mean “same”?same
some
 time in the tertiary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdisciplineinformationtrainingsciencestudyschooling
education
. However
, in the secondary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdisciplineinformationtrainingsciencestudyschooling
education
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedadvanced
developed
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countries
 and developing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 went up 1% and 10% respectively
.

Developing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 were Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).83%, and
83% and
 then it rose to 4% between 1990 and 1998 while You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedadvanced
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 is Consider using either the past participle “grown” or the present participle “growing” here.growngrowing
grow
 up mildly
 1% in primary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdisciplineinformationtrainingsciencestudyschooling
education
 in 1990 and 1998. 