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The chart below shows the number of Apple iPhones sold between June 2007 and December 2010.

The chart below shows the number of Apple iPhones sold between June 2007 and December 2010. Q59kP
The chart provides information on the sales of iPhone around the world from June 2007 to December 2010 in four quarters. Overall. There has been an upward trend in the number of sold iPhones globally while some fluctuations. Although the sales initially had a low rate, they experienced their most significant upturn by the end of the period. Regarding the first quarter, the sales had a steady rise to 2. 3 million devices in December 2007. In the following year, the trend fluctuated, dropping from 1. 7 million to 0. 7 million until June and then rocketing to a high of 6. 9 million in September. At the end of this quarter, the number slipped back to 4. 4 million, which doubled since the previous June. After December 2008, the figures continued to decline steadily, reaching around 3. 8 million in March 2009, but the trajectory was sharply rising for the successive quarter, followed by a gentle 0. 4 million decrease. Ultimately, the sales increased dramatically, hitting a high-point of 14. 1 million sales at the end of 2010.
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of iPhone around the world from June 2007 to December 2010 in four quarters.

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. There has been an upward trend in the number of sold iPhones globally while
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fluctuations. Although the
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sales
initially
had a low rate, they experienced their most significant upturn by the
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end
of the period.

Regarding the
first
quarter, the
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had a steady rise to 2. 3
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million
devices in December 2007. In the following year, the trend fluctuated, dropping from 1. 7
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million
to 0. 7
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million
until June and then rocketing to a high of 6. 9
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million
in September. At the
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end
of this quarter, the number slipped back to 4. 4
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, which doubled since the previous June.

After December 2008, the figures continued to decline
steadily
, reaching around 3. 8
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million
in March 2009,
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the trajectory was
sharply
rising for the successive quarter, followed by a gentle 0. 4
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million
decrease.
Ultimately
, the
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increased
dramatically
, hitting a high-point of 14. 1
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at the
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of 2010.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of Apple iPhones sold between June 2007 and December 2010.

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