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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006 0PR3
The given chart represents the international sales of four different kinds of digital games between 2000 to 2006. Overall, it is clear that both Handheld games, online games and mobile phone games saw a phenomenal rise in global sales. However, Console games have seen a downward trend over the time period. In 2000 and 2001, console games saw a fall from under 6% to 5% and 1% in online games and whereas, Handheld games saw an increase from 9% to 13%. In the next following year online games and mobile games seen a slight increase 2%. Console games saw a drop to 4%. Handheld games have taken a surge to 14%. In 2004 mobile games and online games gradually increasing and constitutes to 5%. Console games remains constant in this year. Handheld games have increased slightly to 15%. On the other hand, in 2005, Mobile and Online games dramatically increased to 6% and 5% respectively. Console games to dip at 3%. Handheld games remained stable. And in the year 2006, Handheld games to reach a peak of 18%. Mobile and online games have steady increase 7% and 9%. Console games to hit the lowest point to 3%.
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chart represents the international sales of four
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between 2000 to 2006
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that both Handheld
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,
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online
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and mobile phone
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saw
a phenomenal rise in global sales.
However
,
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Console
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games
have
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a downward trend over the time period.

In 2000 and 2001,
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console
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games
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saw
a fall from under 6% to 5% and 1% in
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online
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and whereas, Handheld
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games
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saw
an increase from 9% to 13%. In the
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online
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and mobile
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games
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seen
a slight increase 2%.
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Console
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games
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saw
a drop to 4%. Handheld
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have taken a surge to 14%. In 2004 mobile
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and
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gradually
increasing and constitutes to 5%.
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Console
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remains constant in this year. Handheld
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have increased
slightly
to 15%.

On the other hand
, in 2005, Mobile and
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Online
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dramatically
increased to 6% and 5%
respectively
.
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Console
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to dip at 3%. Handheld
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remained stable. And in the year 2006, Handheld
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to reach a peak of 18%. Mobile and
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have steady increase 7% and 9%.
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Console
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to hit the lowest point to 3%.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006

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