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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories by the citizens in UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories by the citizens in UK in 2004. 8GdoV
The spending of remuneration on three different categories (food and drinks, restaurant and hotel, and entertainment) among different age groups of britishers in UK in 2004 is demonstrated by the bar graph. The data has been measured in percentage. After an Overall analysis of the given graph it is clear that, the highest spend went on food and drinks as well as the entertainment and least expenditure went on restaurant and hotel. To begin with, the highest spend went on food and drinks by all age groups recorded above 20 percent, except people under 30 that is only near about 5 percent. Moreover, the expenditure on restaurant and hotel was slightly identical by the public under 30, between 31-45 and between 46-60 (about 14%, 13% and 12% respectively) as compared to people lying between age group 61-75 was less than 5 percent and over 75 years was about 5 percent. Furthermore, the spent on entertainment was highest by the society between 61-75 years as opposed to all the age groups that is over 20 percent. Similarly, there was nearly same spent on the entertainment by age group 31-45 as well as under 30 (nearly 7% and 9% respectively). People between 46-60 showed high spend entertainment that is nearly 12% than the senior citizens that is near about 5 percent.
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britishers
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by the bar graph. The data has
been measured
in percentage. After an
Overall
analysis of the
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that, the highest spend went on food and drinks
as well
as the entertainment and least expenditure went on restaurant and hotel.

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recorded above 20
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people
under 30
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, the expenditure on restaurant and hotel was
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identical by the public under 30, between 31-45 and between 46-60 (about 14%, 13% and 12%
respectively
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61-75 was less than 5
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and over 75 years was about 5
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, the spent on entertainment was
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31-45
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