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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. D9Go

The bar chart illustrates spending of France and UK on 5 consumer items (cars, computers, books, perfume, cameras). Units are measured as pound sterling. Overall, the cars were manufactured the most in both countries during 2010, while the perfume in the UK as well as the cameras in the France were the lowest manufactured items among all other categories. Regarding to the cars, UK spent 450, 000 pound sterling which was the more than France’s spending 400, 000. Furthermore, the British were responsible to spent for fewer money 100, 000 and 200. 000 for the purchase of books and cameras respectively than French in the given year. On the other hand, the amount of money paid out to computers was higher in France. 200, 000 was spent by France on computers which is more than the UK who spent 350, 000 in 2010. Both of the countries spent less for perfume which comprises of exactly 200, 000 in France, but under 150, 000 in the UK.

The bar chart illustrates spending of France and UK on 5 consumer items (cars, computers, books, perfume, cameras). Units are measured
 as pound sterling.

Overall
, the cars were manufactured
 the most in both countries during 2010, while the perfume in the UK Probable usage error. Use "and" after 'both'.and
as well as
 the cameras in the France were the lowest manufactured items among all other categories.

The phrase 'Regarding to' is not correct. Use "Regarding" or "regard to".RegardingRegard to
Regarding to
 the cars, UK You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 450, 000 pound sterling which was the more than France’s spending 400, 000. Furthermore
, the British were responsible to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 for fewer money 100, 000 and 200. 000 for the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 of books and cameras Use "(respectively)" to make a comparison with this adjective.(respectively)
respectively
 than French in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 year.

On the other hand
, the amount of money paid out to computers was higher in France. 200, 000 was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 by France on computers which is more than the UK who You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 350, 000 in 2010. Both of the countries You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 less for perfume which Did you mean "comprises" or "consists of"?comprisesconsists of
comprises of
 exactly 200, 000 in France, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 under 150, 000 in the UK. 