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The chart below shows the different levels of post school qualification in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart below shows the different levels of post school qualification in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 pVY9
The graph gives the information about the diffrent level of post -school qualifications in Australia according to gender in the year 1999. It can be cleary seen that the skilled vocational diploma was done by the highest number of males(90%), while the least females(10%) studied that diploma. Interestingly, the undergraduate diploma was completed by the highest number of females(70%), whereas the males studied (40%). As we can see further, the percentage was nearly same for the males 40% and females 50%, who had completed their bachelor's degree. There was a diffrence of two-fifth between these two genders who had studied post-graduate diploma. The proportion of males (60%)was higher than the females( 40%) for master's degree program. Overal, the percentage of males was higher in skilled vocational diploma, while the proportion of females was higher in under graduate diploma during the period.
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level of post -school qualifications in Australia according to gender in the year 1999. It can be
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males(90%)
, while the least
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females(10%)
studied that
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, the undergraduate
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was completed
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females(70%)
, whereas the
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males
studied (40%). As we can
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, the percentage was
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same for the
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males
40% and
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50%, who had completed their bachelor's degree. There was a
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diffrence
of two-fifth between these two genders who had studied post-graduate
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diploma
. The proportion of
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(60%)was higher than the females
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40%) for master's degree program.
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Overal
, the percentage of
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males
was higher in skilled vocational
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diploma
, while the proportion of
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females
was higher in under graduate
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diploma
during the period.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the different levels of post school qualification in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

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