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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. rJ2p
The line graph represents the crime changing rates in burglary, car theft, and robbery in various areas from the year 2003 to 2012 in the inner city. Overall, it is noticeable that burglary has a fluctuate number of incidents over the period of time. However, the crime theft from the person and car is mostly steady. Interesting, people in Newport city centre experience robbery the least. Focusing on burglary, it start with almost 3500 case in 2003. The rate of incident is increasing to the highest in 2004, which is approximately 3700 incidents). Furthermore, after the highest number of crimes, the situation is fluctuate to about 1250 incidents in 2008 and the crime start to be at constant rate. Turning to steal by a car and from person, car theft started at about 2750 events and robbery happening approximately 700 events in the year 2003; however, both type of crime show a steady movement. In addition, stealing by using vehicle is dramatically decrease from about 2750 incidents in 2005 to 2000 incidents in 2006, which is nearly 750 events difference.
The line graph represents the
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changing rates in burglary,
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theft, and robbery in various areas from the year 2003 to 2012 in the inner city.

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, it is noticeable that burglary has
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number of
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over the period of time.
However
, the
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theft from the person and
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is
mostly
steady. Interesting,
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people
in Newport city
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experience robbery the least.

Focusing on burglary, it
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with almost 3500 case in 2003. The rate of
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is increasing to the highest in 2004, which is approximately 3700 incidents
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.
Furthermore
, after the highest number of
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, the situation is
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to about 1250
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incidents
in 2008 and the
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to be at constant rate.

Turning to steal by a
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and from person,
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theft
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started
at about 2750
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and robbery happening approximately 700
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in the year 2003;
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, both type of
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a steady movement.
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, stealing by using vehicle is
dramatically
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from about 2750
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incidents
in 2005 to 2000
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in 2006, which is
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

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