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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. 3aLbb
The column graph reveals the total hours of leisure time enjoyed by two sexes with respect to their employment status in Britain between the years 1998 to 1999. Data is measured in hours. Generally speaking, the unemployed and retired personals had nearly equivalent free time in both sexes, meanwhile, full-time employed people had least amount of time in both men and women. With regards to unemployed population, they had most hours of free time in both sexes around 82 hours per week, which is also exactly seen in retired personals. On other hand, full-time employed people experiance little amount fo leisure time approximately 49 hours per week for male and females. While speaking about only females, Part-time employed women tend to enjoy least amount of free time exactly 40 hours per week than the housewives who have about 50 hours of leisure time a week.
The column graph reveals the total
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hours
of leisure
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time
enjoyed by two sexes with respect to their employment status in Britain between the years 1998 to 1999. Data
is measured
in hours.

Generally
speaking, the unemployed and retired personals had
nearly
equivalent free
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time
in both sexes, meanwhile, full-time employed
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people
had
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least
amount of
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time
in both
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men
and women.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
unemployed population, they had most
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hours
of free
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time
in both sexes around 82
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hours
per
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week
, which is
also
exactly
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seen
in retired personals. On other hand, full-time employed
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people
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experiance
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little
amount
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fo
leisure
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time
approximately 49
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hours
per
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week
for male and females.

While speaking about
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only
females, Part-time employed women tend to enjoy
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least
amount of free
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time
exactly 40
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hours
per
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week
than the housewives who have about 50
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hours
of leisure
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time
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week
.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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