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The graph below gives information about how teenagers (aged 12-19) in one state in the United States communicated with each other. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how teenagers (aged 12-19) in one state in the United States communicated with each other. 56Lam
The line graph shows the four different ways of communication among adolescents (aged 12-19) in one state in the US for a three-year period from 2006 to 2009. Teens communicate using text messages, email, phone calls or talking face-to-face. Overall, youths used their phones more to talk to one another than talking in real life. The per cent of the teenagers who used text messages increased steadily from 2006 to 2008, when the number of text messages rose dramatically from around 40% to over 55% for just one year. The number of adolescents that talked face-to-face grew with only five percent for the period. Moreover the teenagers who used calls on cell phones fluctuated over the three years reaching a peak in 2007 at around 40 % which was the highest rate for the year. However, communicating via the email became less popular among youths, by 2009 only approximately 10 percent of the youths used it. In conclusion, with the increasing sell phone rates the number of text messages and calls is growing, whereas the teens talking via email or in real life are gradually falling.
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ways of communication among adolescents (aged 12-19) in one state in the US for a three-year period from 2006 to 2009. Teens communicate using
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text
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, email,
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phone
calls or talking face-to-face.

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more to talk to one another than talking in real life. The per cent of the
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teenagers
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text
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increased
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rose
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one year. The number of adolescents that talked face-to-face grew with
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five percent for the period.

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fluctuated over the three years reaching a peak in 2007 at around 40 % which was the highest rate for the year.
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approximately 10 percent of the youths
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rates the number of
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and calls is growing, whereas the teens talking via email or in real life are
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about how teenagers (aged 12-19) in one state in the United States communicated with each other.

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