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The chart below shows number of adults participating in different sports in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows number of adults participating in different sports in 1997 and 2017. 2xGAX
The chart elucidates data of adult participates played in diverse significant sports in single place, in two years. Overall, there were eight various types of sports were conducted in which, thousands of people were participated. However, plethora of adults showed interest towards gentle walking. where, it outraced all sports in that respective years. Firstly, in 1997, approximately 50 thousand people were joined in gentle walking activity. Nevertheless, in 2017, there was a clear evident that huge number of folks participated in walking gentle game, with around 55 thousand players. Basketball and cricket were remained not eminent. Players of jogging and gym were in close proportion around 38 thousand. At last, football players were almost 48 thousand and people involved in hiking were around 49 thousand. Secondly, in 2017, again gentle walking retained highest played game sport with 58 thousand participants. Whereas, cricket was least played game with around 5 thousand people. Following this basketball players were almost 7 thousand. Next to the gentle walking was hiking in which around 49 thousand adults were joined, and football players were close to hiking they came up with around 47 thousand adults. Finally, in jogging and gym the participants were almost same, jogging around 38 thousand and gym around 39 thousand.
The chart elucidates data of adult participates played in diverse significant
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sports
in single place, in two years.
Overall
, there were eight various types of
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sports
were conducted
in which, thousands of
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people
were participated
.
However
, plethora of
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adults
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showed
interest towards
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gentle
walking.
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where
, it outraced all
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sports
in that respective years.
Firstly
, in 1997, approximately 50 thousand
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people
were
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joined
in
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gentle
walking activity.
Nevertheless
, in 2017, there was a
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clear
evident that huge number of folks participated in walking
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gentle
game, with
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around
55 thousand
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players
. Basketball and cricket
were remained
not eminent.
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Players
of jogging and gym were in close proportion
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around
38 thousand. At last, football
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players
were almost 48 thousand and
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people
involved in hiking were
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around
49 thousand.
Secondly
, in 2017, again
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gentle
walking retained highest played game
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sport
with 58 thousand participants.
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, cricket was least played game with
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around
5 thousand
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people
. Following this basketball
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players
were almost 7 thousand.
Next
to the
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gentle
walking was hiking in which
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around
49 thousand
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adults
were
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joined
, and football
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players
were close to hiking they came up with
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around
47 thousand
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adults
.
Finally
, in jogging and gym the participants were almost same, jogging
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around
38 thousand and gym
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around
39 thousand.
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