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The chart below shows annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in 1985, 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in 1985, 1995 and 2005. BlaMa

The given graph illustrates the expenditure on clothing by each person in America every 10 years during the 20 year period from 1985 2005. Overall more money was spent on adult clothing than that of children. Furthermore all kinds of garments saw varying levels of increase with the exception of men’s clothes. In 1985 dick spend it all on female clothes topped with about $500, followed by that on male garments with $300. In the third and last ladies came to girls and boys clothes whose figures words about $100 each. Subsequently you’re spending on woman’s clothes experienced Slight improvement before rocketing to about $650. Moving onto the figure for men’s clothing it reached a peak of approximately $450 in 1995, followed by a drop to $400 in 2005. The amount of money spent on girls clothing items improved remarkably, Preaching about $160 in 2005 while that on boy’s garments witnessed modest growth.

The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 graph illustrates the expenditure on clothing by each person in America every 10 years during the When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "20-year"20-year
20 year
 period from 1985 2005.

Overall
 more money was spent
 on adult clothing than that of children. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Furthermore,
Furthermore
 all kinds of garments This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 varying levels of increase Consider using "except" or "except for"exceptexcept for
with the exception of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
’s clothes.

In 1985 dick spend it all on female clothes topped with about $500, followed by that on male garments with $300. In the third and last ladies came to girls and boys clothes whose figures words about $100 each.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Subsequently,
Subsequently
 you’re spending on woman’s clothes experienced Slight improvement This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 rocketing to about $650. Moving onto the figure for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
’s clothing it reached a peak of approximately $450 in 1995, followed by a drop to $400 in 2005. The amount of money spent on girls clothing items This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorated
improved
remarkably
, Preaching about $160 in 2005 while that on boy’s garments witnessed modest growth. 

IELTS academic The chart below shows annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in 1985, 1995 and 2005.

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American English

4 paragraphs

153 words

6.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 5.5

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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