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The chart below show the percentafe of water used

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The given pie charts display the information about three different ways of using water in North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia. Informed in percentage. By comparing in purposes which are use for industrial, farm, and inland in 6 areas. In Africa, Central Asia and, South East Asia water are used for planting around 85 per cent differ from domestic, It is used 12 times less compare to plating - around 8 per cent. Meanwhile South America is the fourth in the rank of using water for agriculture. It is noticeable that Europe and North America use water to farm-produced just 39 and 32 per cent as follow. Almost half of the usage are for mass production.

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IELTS academic The chart below show the percentafe of water used

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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